As I went through all of the comments on my drafts, I realized that a lot of my issues were in structure and organization. I struggle with creating a seamless flow in my essays. Even though these two essays are so different, in the comments the issue of organization is addressed and criticized. It seems that my ideas are not always clear enough to the reader and that I need to work on outlining before I write. I the future, I think that reverse outlining will help me focus on organization as well. In addition, I sometimes seem to have issues with passive voice. I think I have gotten better at this after learning how to detect passive voice and then change it. Aside from the comments, I know that I find it hard to find the warrants sometimes. I’m working to understand SOAPstone more as well.
Essay Corrections January 20, 2012